My husband has recently started his undergraduate career and asked me for some tips on writing an essay. What started as a basic how-to list became the 7-page, 4,000+-word monster you see below.
My husband and I both went to the same high school, which was a fairly decent school, but none of our teachers ever gave us clear instructions on how to write essays. There were some basic mumblings about outlines, topic sentences and thesis statements, but we always felt as though we were just flailing about until we found something the teacher didn't say needed to be changed, without ever knowing what we did right or wrong.
This lack of clear instruction continued for me in college until I developed a system for getting A's on my papers every time. It took me until the second semester of my junior year to develop this, and until my final semester to perfect it, so it didn't do me much good overall. I share it in the hope that it will help current and future undergrads who received a similar education.
Obviously, as I majored in English, most of the examples are from English Lit. essays, but this method should be widely applicable. A lot of the steps go against conventional thinking about writing essays. Some run exactly counter to how your teachers will tell you to write essays. If you're taking a class where you have to turn in each step of your writing process (index cards, outline, rough draft, etc.), just do the bullshit your teachers wants, but use this method in the background.
I can't guarantee you'll get an A on every paper if you use this method. I can't guarantee it will work for you. All I can say is that every time I used this method to write a paper, I got an A on that paper. If anyone else has another method that works well for them, please share it in the comments.
Angela's Method for Writing an Undergraduate Research Paper
1. Do a small amount of research, i.e.
read a couple Wikipedia articles, search for your topic in JSTOR or
whatever to see how many “full text” articles pop up. Don't read
them yet, skim them if you must.
2. If your preliminary research shows
there will be plenty of info on your topic, great! If not, pick
something else unless you're very interested in that area of
research. Needle-in-a-haystack papers can be fun, but only if the
topic fascinates you. This outline does not cover that type of
research paper.
3. Based on titles, abstracts, and
skimming, find two articles about the same specific aspect of your
topic. Read them carefully and take notes as follows (if doing
research with print texts, it may be easier to do this on paper, then
transfer those notes to a Word document):
a. Before reading, copy down all the
information needed for your citation. If you wait until after reading
it, you WILL forget. Even if you don't use the paper, you are saving
time in the long-run by making this a habit.
b. In a Word document, type your
citation, then below that, type any and all quotes or paraphrases you
might remotely consider using from that article, each as their own
paragraph. After the quote or paraphrase, type the parenthetical
citation, just as you would in your final paper. This habit will save
you about 2 hours of time compared with going back through your
sources to find page numbers.
c. Repeat a and b for the second
article.
4. Now you have a good chunk of notes,
all focusing on a single aspect of your topic. This will dictate your
thesis statement. Find an over-arching main point from those articles
that you will seek to prove. This main point should be backed up by
3-5 supporting facts. Write that in one sentence, and you have your
thesis statement. Examples:
a. “In
Shakespeare's “Hamlet,” Ophelia suffers a series of traumatic
events which lead to a severe case of acute depression, leading to
her eventual suicide: Hamlet's apparent madness and breaking off of
their relationship, her father's murder, and the extended absence of
her beloved brother.”
Here,
there is a main point that Ophelia's depression and suicide are
caused by events in the play. The supporting facts are Hamlet's
behavior, her father's murder, and her brother's absence. You'll notice that this sentence is awkward and could probably be worded better. That did not matter; I still got an A on this paper.
b.
“Tennessee
Williams’s play “A Streetcar Named Desire” is a Postmodern play
in that it (a) deals with a psychological meltdown with elements
influenced by the author’s own life, (b) is a reflection of the
time in which it was written as well as having influenced that time,
and (c) contains stylistic elements unique to Postmodernism.”
This
one is very explicit about what the main point is and what the
supporting facts are. My personal preference is for three supporting
facts. I feel that less than three doesn't make for a strong enough
argument and more than three just gets unwieldy. As you can see in
this example, even just three supporting facts can be difficult to
juggle in a single sentence.
c.
“This
play employs the five main characteristics of literary Absurdism,
namely: satire, dark humor, incongruity, apparently purposeless
situations, and uncertainty.”
This
one is about “Waiting for Godot.” The name of the topic doesn't
have to appear in the thesis statement, so long as the topic is
clearly identified by name in the opening paragraph. More on that
later. I used five supporting facts for this thesis for two reasons:
firstly, I didn't have much to say about each individual fact, so
only exploring three facts would have made my paper too short (remember, your first loyalty is to your grade, not to the quality of your scholarship); and
secondly, my research indicated that Absurdism has five distinct
characteristics, all of which are also present in the play. It made
no sense to leave two out.
d.
“Malory's
story of Pelleas and Ettard points out the problems with a
non-unanimous observance of courtly love including cruelty of the
love interest, emasculation of the lover, and the possibility of
less scrupulous knight taking advantage of the situation.”
Three
supporting points just seem to flow better in a sentence. This one is
about a specific story from Le
Morte D'Arthur. Note the typos. That's what happens when you stay up late to write a paper and don't go back to edit it afterward. If I had a pickier teacher, I would not have gotten an A on this paper.
5.
Now is time for the bulk of your research. Go through each of these
the same way you did the first two articles in step 3: citation,
copious notes, parenthetical citations.
a.
Start with a reputable popular article, such as one from a newspaper
or magazine, with a general overview of your chosen topic. This will
be good for those basic facts you might need to cite that you already
know about your topic from reading Wikipedia. You still usually can't
cite Wikipedia, so find one of these types of articles to cite
instead. Find another one to set in a “read later” pile in case
you need another basic source. Just stick with taking notes from one
for now, though.
b.
If you're very lucky, there will be a third article along the same
lines as your first two from step 3. It is more likely, though, that you will
find one or two that are tangentially related to that specific aspect
of your topic. Take notes from one or two of these, depending on how
many sources you need. If you find others, set them in a "read later" pile.
c.
Now that you have a really good handle on the scholarly
interpretations of your topic, go for the primary sources. In English
Lit, your primary sources would be the actual novel, play, or poem
your paper is based on (or the collected works, journals, and letters
of a particular author). In history, primary sources would be
contemporaneous accounts, archaeological findings, etc. I know, your
teachers would probably tell you to read and take notes on the
primary sources first, but teachers are often wrong. Depending on
your topic, the primary sources can be the hardest part of your
research. Obviously, most of the time you want to take a look at the
primary sources before digging into the analysis (exceptions to this
rule include science, law, and history classes, where primary sources always
come last). However, it is a bad idea to spend much time taking notes
on or analyzing the primary sources until you know what to look for.
(Independent research and analysis is a beautiful thing, but you have
a paper to write. Undergraduate papers are not about exploring your
own theories, they are about condensing and explaining other people's
ideas. Save the independent analysis for your free time, your GPA
will thank you.) So, what do you do with those primary sources at this
point? Read them (or examine them, if it's not a written work) and
pick out quotes (or whatever) that directly support your thesis, your
supporting facts, or just bits you might like to quote in your
introduction or conclusion.
6.
Introductions and conclusions. The bane of the undergrad's existence.
If you remember that most teachers like cheesy introductions and
sappy conclusions, you can take advantage of the grading halo
by impressing them at the beginning and end with little effort on
your part.
Open
up a second Word document that you will be writing your paper in.
Type in your header information, your working title (nothing too
fancy, just a headline version of your main point), and your fully
written-out thesis statement. By “fully written-out” I mean that
you would include, for example, the title of the work and the author
in the same sentence as the thesis statement, like in the first two
examples in step 4. The exact wording will probably get polished up
before you turn your paper in, so don't worry about it sounding good
at this point. If you have a sentence or two in mind that you know
you'd like to put in your introduction, go ahead and do that now. If
not, don't worry about it. In my experience, introductions are
awkward beasts until the meat of the paper is finished, and
conclusions are after-thoughts hastily tacked-on just before you turn
in your paper. So long as you remember “cheese” and “sap” and
proofread everything before you turn it in, your grade will not be
affected.
Within
your document, form a proto-outline. With my method, you will never
be writing a complete outline. They are an absolute waste of time. A
proto-outline looks like this (from the Ophelia paper):
[INTRODUCTION]
[HAMLET'S
BEHAVIOR]
[DEATH
OF POLONIUS]
[LAERTES]
[CONCLUSION]
Each
of these “tags” will remain at the beginning of their respective
paragraphs until you are ready to proofread your paper. I put them in
all-caps in brackets so they are impossible to miss as I'm scrolling
through the document. This way, if I want to jump from working on one
paragraph to another, I can easily find the paragraph I want without
having to skim each paragraph's content. This might seem a small
convenience on a short paper, but once your paragraphs start
sprouting paragraphs, it will be a godsend. It is also important to
make them stand out so you don't forget to remove them before turning
in your paper.
Each
of your supporting points should have its own topic sentence. This
could be something simple, such as “Ettard
shows excessive cruelty toward Pelleas because of her disdain for the
rules of courtly love,”
or it might be a multi-part sentence, like your thesis statement, with supporting points backing up your supporting point. It
does not have to be eloquent or detailed at this point. It's just
serving as a guidepost.
7.
Go back to your notes document. Using either the highlighter or the
font color editor, color-code each individual quote or paraphrase
based on which part of your essay it will work best in. If you aren't
sure how you might use it, leave it black (if you're color-blind, use
contrasting fonts to differentiate). If you're absolutely certain at
this point that you won't use it, cut and paste it to the bottom of
your document. Leave a large gap between the bottom “accepted”
quote and the top rejected one to avoid confusion. This gets it out
of the way for now, but there's no sense in deleting it yet, as you
might change your mind.
8.
Paraphrase as many of the quotes in your notes as you can, and build
sentences around those quotes that you can't paraphrase, then
copy/paste (don't cut and paste, you want the sentences to still be
in your notes document) your sentences into the appropriate portion
of your essay document, except those that you might use for in the
intro/conclusion and ones you aren't sure of how to use. Remember
that when you're quoting or heavily paraphrasing a scholarly source,
you want to throw a phrase in like “according to [whomever], ...”
or “[whoever] wrote in [his/her] article, '[title of article],'
...” Not only will it boost your grade and flesh out your word/page
count, it's good scholarship and actually makes quotes less jarring
for the reader. It's one of those annoying-to-write-but-easy-to-read
things, like writing “s/he said” after every bit of character
dialogue in fiction.
When
you copy/paste your sentences, it doesn't matter yet what order they
go in, so long as they're under the right tag and not before the
topic sentence for that paragraph.
If
your paper is supposed to be double-spaced, go ahead and hit CTRL-A
and double-space the whole thing right now.
Take a look at your page/word
count. Ideally, you should be about half a page (~200 words) under or
over the minimum your teacher expects for this paper. If you're
one-and-a-half to two pages under or one page over the minimum,
that's probably fine, depending on the length expected. If you're
three or more pages under, you either need to go back and take more notes
from your sources, or find a few (or a lot) more sources. Just repeat
step 5. If you're more than one page over the minimum count, you
might be fine or you might end up having to remove some things,
depending on how much bulk is added when you flesh it out. If your
assignment is 3-5 pages, and you're on page 5 after only copy/pasting
your notes, you have too much and need to cut out some. If it's a
5-10 page assignment and you're on page 7 at this point, you'll be
fine.
9.
Hit CTRL-A again and collapse your document back down to
single-spacing, if you double-spaced it earlier. It's easier to edit
a document when you can see more of the words on your screen at one
time. Focusing on just one paragraph at a time, move your sentences
around so they make more sense, adding connecting words or transition
sentences as needed, making sure to keep the citations with their
respective sentences. You may notice as you're doing this that there
are certain areas that need to be fleshed out more, or certain facts
you want to include that you don't have citations for. Write these
down (either in a notebook you keep on your desk for such purposes,
or in your notes document) and come back to them later. Another
option would be to put directly into your essay document something
along the lines of “[INSERT SENTENCE ABOUT (WHATEVER) HERE].”
Again, in all-caps and brackets so you can't miss it while skimming.
10.
Now we're going back to the introductory paragraph. There are two
options for a good intro: fact-quote-thesis or fact-fact-thesis.
a.
Fact-Quote-Thesis: Find a short quote to build your introduction
around. It could be from a primary source, or one of your scholarly
articles. Do not pick a quote from the popular article, it won't be
good enough. Again, remember to build a sentence around it. No one
likes free-floating quotes. The basic formula for this type of
introductory paragraph is: Fact, Quote, Sentence, Thesis, Transition.
The first sentence is supposed to be something that “pulls your
reader in,” but it's usually pretty boring. In English Lit., it
might be, “Within
the context of the Arthurian Legend, and often outside that context
as well, Merlin is known to be the greatest, most powerful wizard who
has ever lived or ever will live.”
In History, it might be, “Despite
its name, the War of 1812 actually lasted from 1812 to 1815.”
The first sentence is just some little fact that doesn't need to be
cited (common knowledge). The first sentence is one of the six+ sentences that
should never have a citation attached to them (the others being your
thesis statement, the rewording of your thesis statement in the
conclusion, and the topic sentences of each of your supporting
paragraphs). You
may choose to put the title and author (or whatever) in your first
sentence rather than in your thesis statement. Just make sure that if
you move this crucial information out of the thesis statement, that your
thesis is still clear. I once had a teacher take points off because he
"couldn't find the thesis statement." I thought it was pretty clear (and
thought he was an idiot), but don't take chances. When in doubt, leave
that information in, even if you feel you're repeating yourself.
Then you tack in your quote sentence. You may need a
transition sentence or phrase between the fact and the quote for
smoother reading, but if you can't figure one out right now, skip it.
You can write it during proofreading. You will almost certainly need
a transition sentence between your quote and your thesis, and you
will want a transition sentence between your thesis and your first
supporting paragraph. Again, if you cannot come up with how to word
these sentences yet, skip them and write them during proofreading.
b.
Fact-Fact-Thesis: This works pretty much the same as F-Q-T, but
instead of the quote, include an interesting fact or two. This fact
would need to be cited, because interesting facts are rarely common
knowledge. F-F-T is my preferred method for intros because I tend to
save the quotes for the conclusion. Facts are cheesy, quotes are
sappy.
11.
Now for the last round of research. All those little things you noted
in step 9 you now have to find the answers to. First, look for things
to use from your notes document. Anything that didn't get color-coded
because you didn't know where to use it is fair game here, as are all
those things you thought you definitely wouldn't use. Flesh out
everything you can with those, but most likely there will still be
some gaps that need to be filled. So bring up those popular articles
you set aside for the basic facts, and the extra scholarly articles
you didn't use for the more specific facts. Write down their
citations. Read through them, but instead of taking notes on anything
that might be useful, look specifically for things that will fill
holes in your paper. Again, write your quotes and paraphrases in your
notes document (you're preserving these notes because you might be able to use them in a future paper), but right after doing that, try to immediately fit
your source into your paper. If you can't do it right now without it
being clunky, just drop the quote/paraphrase in there gracelessly.
You'll pick it up in proofreading. Just make sure to note your
citations.
12.
Go to the end of your document and insert a page break. Type “Works
Cited” at the top (if you're using MLA format). Copy/paste the
citations of any sources that you cited in your paper (i.e., any that
have color-coded quotes associated with them, or any that have quotes
you were just working with in step 11) into your Works Cited page.
Put them in alphabetical order by author's last name (or title of
work, if author is unknown). Adjust your spacing and indents. Using
the highlight function, highlight each author's name (or first word
of the title) in a different color. Then, working down the list one
author at a time, find every place where you cited that author in
your paper and highlight the parenthetical citation in that author's
color. If there is an author you didn't find cited in your paper,
find out why. If you forgot to move their quotes to your document in
step 8, do so now, finding a place for them to fit best into their
respective paragraphs. If it's because they didn't have anything
worthwhile to cite, delete them from Works Cited. Conversely, if you
find a parenthetical citation in your paper that hasn't been
highlighted, move that citation to your Works Cited page now and
assign the author a color and highlight the parenthetical. Leave it
like that for awhile.
13.
Now's the best part: Proofreading! I highly recommend that for your
first round of proofreading, you should be either a little sleepy or
a little drunk. Both do the same thing to your brain.
Sleepiness/drunkenness makes one more creative. You want that at this
point. But if you're too sleepy/drunk, you just get sloppy.
Moderation in all things. So, stay up 'til 1 am or have a couple
beers, then sit down to work on your proofreading. Do not get
drunk/intentionally sleepy at any other point in this process. Only
for step 13.
Firstly
you want to delete your tags. Anything in brackets and all-caps gets
removed, but be sure you've covered all the research notations if you
used that option in step 9. Now, read your paper, focusing on only
one paragraph at a time. Obviously, fix typos if you come across
them, but what you're really looking for right now is proper flow and
rhythm. Any transitions between sentences you couldn't figure out
with your fully-awake brain, awkward and dopey topic sentences, etc.
Trim it up and make it sing. You'll probably be moving sentences
around again, cutting duplications and superfluous facts, and so on,
so be sure you're keeping the parentheticals with their respective
quotes/paraphrases. I know I've said that a lot, but it's really
important.
Then,
after making each paragraph pretty, work on your transitions between
paragraphs. The key to this is a concept I call “gems.” Each
paragraph has a gem – the small morsel of information, usually just
a couple words, it's getting at. It's often not the topic sentence
concept, either, which I still find surprising. The topic sentence is
backed up by all these facts, which coalesce to form another,
slightly separate point – the gem. Once you find this gem, you
incorporate it into the topic sentence or the sentence after the
topic sentence of the next paragraph. This is slightly advanced stuff
and takes practice to really get, but once you get it, your teachers
will adore you. If you don't get it yet, don't worry about it. Just
let each paragraph stand on its own and you'll be fine.
If you don't like your working title, now is the time to change it. Most teachers don't care what you title your paper (I honestly think most don't even look at the title), but those that do care want the title to be short and directly related to your thesis. Don't get too creative here. Err on the side of simplicity.
Lastly,
after you've made your paper sing and you're still in a particularly
poetic mood, write your concluding paragraph. Throw in a quote,
bemoan the fate of the main character/author/historical figure, shine
a ray of joyous hope on the future of the topic. Don't lay it on too
thick, but tinge your conclusion with emotion somehow. Just make sure
that, in doing so, you restate your thesis. That shit's always in the
rubric, so you'll lose points if you don't. And your conclusion
doesn't have to be too long. A couple sentences will do, if they're
longer ones. Here's a couple examples:
a.
“In
“A Streetcar Named Desire,” Tennessee Williams portrays a mental
breakdown in a uniquely Postmodern way, including surrealist
elements, autobiographical references and tying the themes firmly to
the times in which he wrote. Though the 1940’s was not a decade
that was open to “overt homosexuality,” Williams was able to take
“his own tortured searching for sexual and emotional fulfillment”
and turn it into “plays with remarkably frank heterosexual themes”
(Gardner 1331) which explore “the dynamics of sexuality, violence,
and alienation” (Gainor 681) in a way that was embraced by the
public at the time and continues to be relevant today.”
b.
“Despite
the power struggles between Merlin and Nimiane in the Prose
Merlin,
the story seems to be more focused on simply being a love story of
fatal tragedy. Despite her cunning, Merlin's imprisonment is not
truly Nimiane's doing: the ending was determined well before her
birth by the gods. Tennyson took this story about fate and turned it
into a story about the evil possible in women. Written at a time when
women still had few rights, but the women's rights movement was just
getting started, this poem could easily be read as an allegory of the
political situation at the time.”
c.
“Pelleas
is a knight who lives by the rules of chivalry and courtly love, but
steadfastly following these rules does him no good when those around
him do not follow the same rules. Ettard – described as “proud”
by outside observers three separate times in the story – doesn't
care to follow a set of rules which will make her the lover of a man
she doesn't like, and Gawain is simply a womanizer who doesn't care
to miss an easy opportunity. Here Malory uses Gawain's reputation,
created in the French texts, for being a man “with whom no woman
was safe” (Hopkins 55) and who only vaguely followed the rules of
chivalry, at best (53), to great effect. While the version of this
story in the Suite
de Merlin
has Gawain unexpectedly falling in love with Ettard, Malory removes
all mention of Gawain's emotional state (Larrington 115), changing
the story into a commentary on the vulnerability of the knight in
love.”
Now
get some sleep and sober up.
14.
After getting plenty of rest, read through your paper again, fixing
the typos you inevitably made while proofreading. If you have the
time, set the paper aside, don't even look at it, for two full days.
Then proofread it again, sober and awake. You probably don't have the
time, though, so just read it over now and fix the mistakes you see.
Again, if you have the time, have someone else look over it for typos
and to assess the flow and rhythm of your words. One of your fellow
classmates might be willing to trade papers with you for this
purpose. Just make sure the person is honest, competent, and can give
constructive criticism. Someone who just says, “looks great!” is
totally useless to you.
15.
If you're using MLA format (and maybe some others too, but MLA is all
I have experience in), look for places where you've cited the same
author twice (or more) in a row. Delete the author's name (but leave
the page number) from each citation except the first one in the
chain. See Purdue OWL for more details on MLA citations.
Double-check
once again that all sources in your Works Cited have been used in
your paper and that all sources used in your paper are included in
Works Cited. It's a simple thing, but so easy to fuck up, and you do
not want to lose points over something like that.
Remove
all the highlighting from your essay and Works Cited pages.
Double-space, if needed. Check your page count. If it's not
enough, you need to spend some more time fleshing things out.
16.
Now, again, if you have time, we get to the “nit-picky stuff.”
These are tiny mistakes that could cost you points on an otherwise
well-written paper. Turn on your Nonprinting Characters. Your screen
will be filled with dots and arrows and paragraph symbols. Did you
tab to indent your paragraphs, or did you format your paragraphs to
be indented? Tabbing could mess up the way your paper looks on your
teacher's screen, if you're submitting it electronically. Is
everything in the same font, or did you switch between Arial
and Calibri
at
some point? Just hit CTRL-A and change it all to one font, with one
font size. All the dots are spaces. Is there some place where you hit
spacebar twice between words? Get rid of that. Some teachers are
surprisingly picky about that sort of thing, though most aren't that
insane. Still, if you have the time, don't take chances.
I thought this was good. Especially on proof-reading, a lost or overlooked art.
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